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Things Fall Apart by Pia
This is very angsty and rated PG-13 for content. Again, this could be either point of view. I hope you guys like this, even though it is dark.
I hear the sound of your voice and feel your presence surrounding me but then it all falls apart. The look in your eyes is soft, illuminating, and the pain is suddenly not so overwhelming but then it all falls apart. There is hope when I see you smile and I know that I can breathe again but then it all falls apart. I am so close, at long last close enough, and I reach out and feel, finally I feel, but then it all falls apart. ... and everything fades to black ..
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